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the art of detachment by ~inmyroom:iconinmyroom:





You split hands from cheeks,
cupped, like English tea in morning light
before a cool moan has swept over.

I laid my eyelids down, dropped lashes hard
to the floor, so the sound of breaking away
came from me, instead
of your heel-slaps
against stone.

My mutters ran along with the drowsy winds,
pushing my heart back inside,
where the polished worktops
and a neatly made bed left me with nothing to do
but glare at the dent
you left in my sofa
or in my bird-cage of a chest

and four days I remained there,
working my way into the wall cracks
as the air stood still --

no longer forcing my jagged pulse to hurdle me
in the other direction,
like when I thought I saw your face
pushed up close to the window.

I let the feeling settle into my skin,
pulling each vein out through the gaps of my ribcage,
throbbing as the image of your eyes aided the tug.
Strands were hooked around your finger-tips
stripping me away
vigorously,

until my arteries had no more love
to carry away from my heart
and spit out on the floor.
©2005-2009 ~inmyroom
:iconinmyroom:

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:iconandersonart:
Genius as always.

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"We drank wine in the matinée and the spotlight showed what I chased away..."
:iconprosepetals:
:wow:!!! :+fav:

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"...I can be cruel, but let me be gentle with you..."

~~Be careful...it's dumb out there.
:iconfireyblackrose:
This makes me so sad :(
Gorgeous imagery as usual though.
:iconanimefreaktose:
breathtaking and painfully beautiful. great peice as always, my dear!
:iconthoughtsheldcaptive:
really vivid. great imagery and creative descriptions like "bird-cage of a chest"

the stanza that begins with "no lonoger forcing..." is my favorite. the simile about English tea in the opening stanza is great too.

keep up the good work
:iconsoloact-the-bard:
ooooh! :thumbsup: B-)

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"Scoffers of the Bible's Prophesies tend to readily embrace other false belief systems, ie: rapture, Nostradamus, evolution, & the History Channel's opinions." "It's very dangerous to call one's self a Christian, and call God's Word a conspiracy theory."
:icontuishimi:
Very nice! Is this current, or was it kept tucked away somewhere waiting for its time to see the light on dA? Anyway, you should just quit whatever you have been doing and become the Queen's official poet! :) Seriously, you've got to get your stuff out and noticed (other than here). Maybe save up after college and publish a limited run of your own, then let the publishers discover you. :D

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...be quick to listen, slow to speak, slow to anger...
:iconshteffanos:
'or in my bird-cage of a chest' ..love that.
great imagery, as always. :)
x

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shteffanos waz 'ere, '07.
:iconshinzona:
maybe that will help me get over 'her'

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"When we talked, I talked about me, you talked about you, when we should have talked about each other." - (Michel Poiccard in 'A bout de souffle' )
:iconmikeyblighe:
Gah, how can someone be this good a writer? o.o;;

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"They ate every letter in the alphabet and still had an appetite."

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