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You are beautiful.

Your words equate to glass bottles
collapsing on the dance floor.
Those black and white beats
against my coloured-in face
never once made contact
and my focus heaved its way to you.

The room was packed full of noise and dysfunctional shadow,
and only me and you welcomed the vacant air in,
I savoured pure Sambuca lips,
iced over and leaving me with a ghostly perception.

You coiled between my hands,
my waiting eyes were on look out
for your vanishing act.
It was bound to come soon because
you love the clunk of my body
as it clashes on the ground,
don’t you?

Light thrashed against faceless bodies
as they moved close against this song,
hands and arms reached deep inside the verse
and pulled the life back out.

Music is made from love, you see,
trapped in dead sound
and fastened tight in words.
Yes, music is made from love,
each note slams hard
against your heart
when love topples over, when love goes away.

I didn’t notice this until I met you
and you dared to ask me
why I sit in silence.
©2005-2009 ~inmyroom
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:iconspiffnifty:
Woh... I'm not much for commenting on poetry, but I love this piece. It painted a very vivid picture in my mind. I like your coy play of words, the way you placed everything. Deeper meaning and personal experience shine through. Very nice indeed.

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More than a voice, less than reason.
:iconsweetbeer:
GAHHHH...I wanted to write something like this before...and yet it never came out write. :faint: I congragulate you and welcome back.I missed your poetry.I really like this one esecially the comparison of love to music.Very common comparison, but you made it work. I espcially liked the last stanza...

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GOOD GIRLS are BAD GIRLS who don't get caught
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~FelinesClub
:iconelf-buttercup:
Really being missing your work... again. a lovely piece.

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Well that was unexpected..

:heart: Will never forget you :pumpkin: :heart:
:iconnoamericanidiot:
Vivid imagery, although not one of your strongest pieces. Awesome work all the same. Some of the metaphors made were... I dunno, but that's what's bugging me about the pieces... as if they don't fit into the mood of the poem. Then again, that's just me. <3

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Slowly, deftly, music shall caress you, hear it, feel it, secretly posess you...
:iconwetblackink:
you are amazingly talented! i absoutely love this one. it completely describes the feeling. you have a definant way with words.

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but i'm still not comfortable in my skin
and the anesthetics slowly wearing thin
:iconwetblackink:
ps. i think i will have to favorite every one of your works because they are all so wonderful to read and jump into.

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but i'm still not comfortable in my skin
and the anesthetics slowly wearing thin
:iconrandomoo:
Amazing - your conclusions on music are the words I've needed to hear. I adored every part of this piece; your opening line is a great hook, and the ending leaves you satisfied and filled with emotion. -applauds-

P.S. - WELCOME BACK =D!!!!!! :glomp: :glomp: :hug:

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"I'm going home. You type and think too fast. I'll read this tomorrow. Although I see you've heaved disparagings towards Mr. Beethoven.

Loser."

-my mentor
:iconbellezzadisonno:
Oh wow...I love it....please, continue to forever write....such poetry should not be kept hidden.

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"While the wicked stand confounded, call me, with thy saints surrounded."
~Boondock Saints
:iconthe-sohi:
absolutely amazing, but

"only me and you existed in the room that night." is so incredibly cliché i am guilty of using it myself once, probably word for word.

i say re-write that line to make an excellent poem perfect!

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:meditate:
i ask of life,
not to be part of something, but to be part for something.

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