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Five nights ago I said
'do not tell me when you pack up your life-suit into an overnight bag
and aim your knees at runways',

those words came farther
than from the bottom of a wine glass,

sometimes I ache
in places I cannot name,

so I'd rather not try and say
what my swelling organs should.

I promised myself I would not hold suction cups to your front door
or paint stop signs on your wallpaper, or send out SOS messages
in Morse code when I should really be saying goodbye

with smiles and a good luck wink. But I was told not to make promises
I can't keep.

You say these things and I want to cover my womb up,
ashamed of the dry patches between my hipbones.  

and I remember things like

us laid in a room punching the air away,
re-naming our hands and counting thread veins,
we were 10 years old again
telling secrets from different corners
of the mattress.

I remember things like the day you bleached your hair
and said you were leaving,
I put my forehead down and cried into places you could not see.

I told you I was picking grout from the floor tiles so I would not have to look up
and tell you

'I am afraid'.

This is not a brother in Australia, or a friend that changes plans,
it's not a boyfriend that says 'I don't' the same time I confess
'I do',

it's not a mother who is disappointed
or a father that yells, then breaks DVD players
and bathroom tiles with angry teeth.

It's more than that
and my cold bones know it.
©2006-2009 *inmyroom
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once again amazing

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I want to speak poetry,
Like your soft lips grazing mine...
You're so beautiful...

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true friends

i find it very sad... just like life, sometimes... so true to life...

i guess there's little consolation in how great this piece turned out. but it's really wonderful.

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rebellious, uschooled writers break rules;
an artist masters the form."

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it's wonderful.

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awesome, that's it.
Touching.
Stricken with grief.
Put wieghts on my hearts
Spiders in the stomach
and memories are walking
walking back home.

Poem = good.

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this is completely amazing. you write so beautifully. :rose:

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Anthony and Dana--December 1, 2007
"I'll stop the world and melt with you"
This is amazing. It puts to words feelings and emotions that evade words, and puts to mind things that were buried a long time ago.

:heart:

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The nastiest thing i've ever seen.

91.2.14.06
Stanzas two and seven were my favorites. Actually, every stanza could be a favorite now that I look back at it for a third time. It's really amazing. I'm not sure I like the "cold bones" in the last line though. It almost seems to standard for all of the beauty you created before it. Beautiful poem.

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“The only way to deal with an unfree world is to become so absolutely free that your very existence is an act of rebellion.”- Albert Camus
Whoa.... Haven't been on here in a while and when I came on and browsed my Devwatch messages, I came across this. Wonderful. Really is. I love the line ;

"sometimes I ache
in places I cannot name"

Beautifully written yet again :)
chilling ending, like the note of mystery, yet i also like how it's a possibility that it could be either one of the characters mentioned too

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